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Monday, November 18, 2013


Welcome! I'm writing this week to the word prompt "loose". Here's a short bit from my WIP, prequel to the Hollywood Hearts series called: 


Coach gathered all the players together.
“Mr. Oswald is going to be here during practice for the next few weeks.”
“Who’s Mr. Oswald?” One of the rookies piped up.
“He’s the owner of your team, asshole.” A ripple of laughter went through the crowd.
“What for, Coach?”
“He’s makin’ cuts to the squad at the end of next month. So be on your toes. And for Crissakes, be on time! Let’s go.” He gestured and the men broke into teams and went back to running plays. 
“You’ve got a visitor,” Harley said, pointing to the stands.
Mark looked over to see Penny sitting in the third row. He waved to her and she waved back. Mark’s arm muscles were loose, he threw pass after pass that hit their marks. Coach actually smiled for a second before his natural scowl returned. Penny is bringing me luck. His good mood continued until he hit the showers. Darvin cornered Mark.
“I’d better make the cut, Davis or you’ll be playing from a wheelchair.”
“Is that a threat?”
“Sure as hell ain’t a birthday card.”
“Hey, if it’s you or me, may the best man win.”
“And that’s me. Bad enough you stole that chick from me. Uptight little bitch.”
Mark pushed Sweetwater up against the wall. “Watch the way you talk about her.”
“Yeah?” An evil grin spread across Darvin’s face. “Got the hots for the little slut?”
“None of your business. This is about football, Sweetwater. So leave it there.”
“This is about you and me, Davis. You start it and I’ll finish it.” 


Lindsay said...

Someone's got it really bad for a girl. Talk about protective. Love it

V.L. Locey said...

"He`s the owner of your team, a$$hole!"

Now that`s how a group of athletes talk. Wonderfully done!

Karen Cino said...

Love how a woman could make men react like this. Pictured myself right there in the middle of things,

SherryGLoag said...

This sounds so authentic. Great piece.

Sarah Cass said...

Gah...I HATE Sweetwater! What a prick and half!! Blech.

(In other words, great really got my emotions going)

S.E said...

Love the rivalry.

Davee said...

naked male ego captured it!
great TT

Jillian said...

love the dialogue. Way to channel a male conversation!

Iris B said...

Oh my, a bit of rivalry .... nice one this week!

morgan said...

I never knew you knew football. Kudos to you.

Anonymous said...

Love it! Especially the line 'Sure as hell ain't a birthday card'.